Monday, 30 May 2016

The death slide

“Aaahh!” 
I'm sooo scared. Why did I sign up for this? I'm petrified. I can't believe people pay to do this. More importantly, why did I pay to do this!? 

If you don't know what the heck I'm talking about I'll tell you. It was a nice summer day and I was at clip n climb. I stepped in the overalls. My heart was beating so loud I could hear it. My first step on the slide a cloud of shadows bunched over me 50 kids staring right at me. I clung my hands onto the handlebars. 

They pull me up. I was shaking so much it felt like I was on a boat. As I reach level 3 I feel the urge to drop, but my cousin and Aunty were screaming “You can do it Lu!” so I grip the handlebars even more tightly and then DROP! 

I run up to my cuz and give her a big hug. 
“What are you doing?” she said. 
“I made it to the top!” 
“No you didn't, you only made it halfway” 
The big smile on my face drops. 
“But you still have one more turn. This time I know you'll make it to the top.”

I step on that death slide for the second time. My hands grip onto the handlebars again, still shaking, and this time I was sweating too. Going up again, past level 4. Yay, everything going well, till…. DROP!! 

Did I do it? Did I do it!? 
“You made it to level 6! You were so close!” 
I have one more go. Let's  make it count. Everything’s in slow motion. I step on that death slide like I'm moon walking. It's happening. I'm going up like a rocket. Everybody's screaming “You can do it!”  in really deep voices. 
I reach level 7. I have to drop but I see the look on my cousin's face. I couldn't let her down. I look up slowly, knowing it's going to be my last action. Everything stops. The lady yells “Let go!” so I did.

I run up to my cousin. 
“I'm so sorry, I promise I'll make it to the top next time” 
“Wait what are you talking about? You made it to the top.” 
WHAT!!! I'm so proud of myself ,I feel on top of the world. Time to do do my happy dance 

I did it I did it!! 
“Man I couldn't have done any of this without you, thanks Lis” ☺️☺️☺️☺️





                   My reflection 


When writing I was learning to show emotion, not tell. For example: Like instead of saying I was scared you could say a shiver runs down my spine. 
I think that I did well because I also improved on my punctuation and using better words. My next step is to be able to connect my ideas to a different time in my life. 


1 comment:

  1. Great work lu. I fell like it really connected to me.👍👍😍

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