Thursday, 18 February 2016

Where does my heart lie ?

          Where does my heart lie?
Where harakeke dances in the warm summer breeze 
reaching out to touch me as 
it casts a dark shadow over the ground. 

Where toe toe bounces up and down nicking it while walking past.
It brings me to a beach world, 
where toe toe can grow and wave their hair hello.

Where the cabbage tree stretches out to poke me with its pointy end 
as sharp as my dogs nails 
Pulling me to a world of the park where the cabbage tree asks me: 

Where does my heart lie?
Well, wherever my friends and family are.

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I am learning to use personification but not just in 
poem’s in my other writing to.
I am going well because I've been working on a poem and that 
was the perfect time to try personification 
for example: it was a windy day I went for a walk
as the wind pulled me more and more towards it.
My next step is to be able to connect my ideas I already have many 
I just need to be able to connect them.




6 comments:

  1. I liked your poem as- specially the ending of where dos my hart lie well, we're ever my friends and family are well done

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  2. Great job lucie I like the part that said where the
    Harakeke dance in the warm summer breeze

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  3. Great job Lucie.
    Wow this makes me shiver so in depth. I really love the part where you said where the cabage tree stretches out to poke me with it pointy ends as sharp as my dog fingernails pulling me to a world of the park where the cabage tree arks me where dose my heart lie well where ever my friends and family are.
    I also liked the part where you said where toe toe can grow and wave their hair hello.
    This price is so inspiring I want to go and write one just like it well done.

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  4. I liked the bit where you said the harakeke dancers in the warm summer breeze

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